As I was walking home from school I saw an strange house across the road, it was dark and gloomy it was even dark at 3:07 in the afternoon so I ran across the road. There I was standing right outside of the house. As the leaves rusted my heart was racing in fear I wanted to go in so I did... There I was in the strange house there was a sound that said get out! I was so scared I tryed to get back out but I couldn't so I ran the the window I just got out.
I'm Tyjacobson I like your 100 word writing, you had good words for story. Just one thing you should put more design and color.
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MissGray (Team100)
11/29/2014 07:36:37 pm
A good 100 WC entry Zahra. I like the way you have begun with an interesting sentence starter. You have chosen some good vocabulary to interest your reader - well done.
Next time you write try to include a wider range of punctuation to show off what you know.
Keep writing!
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John C (Team 100WC)
12/2/2014 10:04:58 am
This is such a good story - lots of suspense and you created some scary moments.
I like to read aloud my writing to check I have a strong story flow and check for punctuation
Keep up your writing
John C
Australia