One glorious day, Ginger the fluffy cuddly cat went for a walk down the path. As the sun shone down in front of her, she suddenly scuttled down the stairs. Ginger felt steaming hot so she found a green lake. She loved the water so she decided to go swimming. There was a broken tree laid across the lake. Ginger tried to lift it up but it was to heavy. She slipped and the water pushed her down the waterfall. Luckily Ginger landed on another tree branch. She ran as fast as she could and went the whole way home.
Macy,
What a fabulous entry to the 100WC. You did a wonderful job incorporating the prompt into your piece. Your use of descriptive vocabulary really helped me visualize the setting (glorious day). You also used fabulous verbs to make it more interested (scuttled). It was a very creative piece and you captured my attention. I will be recommending you to the Showcase this week. Good luck Macy!
Mrs. Hanna (Team 100WC, Canada)
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Milagros
11/12/2014 06:26:57 am
Hi Macy,
I really liked your 100 W.C story. I like how you began the story by describing the setting by saying "One glorious day'. I also liked how you used descriptive language because it gave me an idea of the plot and how it might look. I also enjoyed how you used the verbs to describe things (scuttled). Congratulations on getting on the showcase this week.
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Vanessa
11/13/2014 07:38:27 am
Hi Macy
I liked your story I like how you said the fluffy cuddly cat walked down the path and then he was slipping of the waterfall. Then ginger landed on a tree branch and he found his way home.
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Leidy, Grade 7, California USA
11/13/2014 08:47:29 am
Hey Macy!
Your 100 word challenge was amazing. I really liked how you said: Ginger felt steaming hot. It was great it is like a metaphor. I thought it was just fantastic. I can really relate to that because when it was summer it was very hot so I was in the pool almost all day so I can really relate.Keep on writing you are doing great.
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Cesar Grade 7 California USA
11/13/2014 11:19:33 am
Hi Macy, I liked your story I really liked how you described how your cat felt. I also liked the part when your cat went in the green lake.